Thursday, November 8, 2007
Is poverty necessary?
I think poverty is necessary. To provide world's economic balance, poverty is needed in some ways. Think of a country that everybody is rich, in that country, nobody would want to work. People would only spend their money without working and in the end, sources would run out. Also that country wouldn't develop. Think of a world which has only these type of countries; no developing, no education, no ambititon and as a result no sources after some time. We can also see other examples in our daily life. Such as big companies, -which is owned by rich people-employing poor people as office boys, maids, security guards, secretaries. If everyone one was rich, people would have to do all these work by themselves and they wouldn't have enough time and energy for all this work. Because of this no work would be done properly. As a result, with the evidence that i have offered, we can see how poverty is necessary.
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My topic sentence is,
provide world's economic balance, poverty is needed in some ways.
I think it states the main idea clearly.
Topic sentence is,provide world's economic balance,poverty is needed in some ways.there are two supporting sentences and example is one of supporting sentences.I can understand clearly why poverty is necessary in this writing.
Her topic sentence is provide world's economic balance, poverty is needed in some ways.
I understand everything abaut this paragraph. Her supporting sentences are strong. I think this paragraph is interesting.
Topic sentence is; "provide world's economic balance, poverty is needed in some ways". She supported this main idea and she gave an example.
Topic sentence which is "provide world's economic balance,poverty is needed in some ways is so clear. Also she gave supporting sentences, an example and conclusion sentence. This paragraph is understandable.
Her topic sentence is," provide world's economic balance, poverty is needed in some ways ".In addition,she has used supporting sentences with various examples for explaining her opinion and also she concluded her argument at the end of the writing.she express her opinion in an apparent and clear way.
The topic sentence is, provide world's economic balance,poverty is needed in some ways. Her idea is clearly because I can understand about this paragraph easily.
The topic sentence is the second sentence i think,because the fallowing sentences are supporting the second sentence and the paragraph is clear to understand that why poverty is necessary.
The topic sentence is" provide world's economic balance, poverty is needed in some ways." It is a good topic sentence. It's clarify and understandable.The student gave an example.It is a good writing paragraph.
I think the topic sentence is 'to
provide world's economic balance, poverty is needed in some ways'. This sentence makes it understandable to give what about the text is. It was supported by examples sentences.
her topic sentence states the main idea clearly and also there are very good examples to support the idea.
her topic sentence is,provide world's economic balance, poverty is needed in some ways.I think that this blog entry is understandable.The topic sentence is clear and not too specific and the concluding sentence is strong.Therefore, we can conclude that this paragraph is so clear and it is interesting. all writing criteria is fulfilled
Everything is understendable in this writing.İn this writing the topic sentence is to provide worlds balance , poverty is needed in some ways.there are 6 supporting sentences.The supporting details are examples.
I wuuld omit the first sentence as it adds nothing to your paragraph. Begin with the second sentence, which as your readers have pointed out, is the topic sentence. That, combined with your concluding sentence, give structure to the paragraph.
You give decent examples but they do suffer from some logical weaknesses. "Nobody would want to work" is an extreme generalization and is therefore unprovable. And think about this sentence: "People would only spend their money without working and in the end, (resources) would run out." In this scenario, who would be manufacturing, supplying and selling the goods that the "rich" people would be buying? You haven't quite proven the link between development and wealth. However, there is good effort here and you show awareness of how to structure a paragraph.
this topic sentence is second sentence . ı can understand very clearly because this paragraph is very succesful.
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