I think there should not be poverty. In most of countries there are a lot of people who live in poverty and it is caused inequality. But everyone has same rights and should have same life’s forms. In the other hand poverty is caused undevelopment because of running only to live, the poor people spend their all time by working. They have no choices. They should earn money certain ways to live. Also in poor family children do not improve themselves because of difficulties in their lifes. So poverty has important problems, I wish we could do something to destroy. Actually we can do it; but it requires humanity for every person. Everyone should be minded and we should move together for poor people. We should be sensitive! Eventually, we live together and we are affecting each other’s life.
In Marshall’s article, he mentions about citizenship and society, he talks about rights and he defends that there is only one exact right and it is the education right children have. Yes it is true; but this right even could not be used. For example in Turkey, do all children study any school? Surely they do not. Who is responsible? Only their families? I do not think so. We are all responsible for this problem. But unhappily we do not do anything for even if this important problem. Any more, we must be mindful!
In Marshall’s article, he mentions about citizenship and society, he talks about rights and he defends that there is only one exact right and it is the education right children have. Yes it is true; but this right even could not be used. For example in Turkey, do all children study any school? Surely they do not. Who is responsible? Only their families? I do not think so. We are all responsible for this problem. But unhappily we do not do anything for even if this important problem. Any more, we must be mindful!
3 comments:
exactly ı allow this to be true this paragraph.It's a good example of writing a good paragraph.Topic sentence is clear;it is not too specific or general.Other sentences are expound the main idea.It's a complete sentence.In addition to these,she explained with many examples why poverty should not be necessary.
My blog post's topic sentence is of course "there should not be poverty".Because I explained it.After this sentence I wrote my thoughts and gave examples.I think my post has supporting sentences and conclusion sentences.Also there are two paragraphs in it.But they are related with each other.Actually the second one is for supporting the first one.And I think there is not any unnecessary sentence.It is enough to be a good paragraph.
Your topic sentence would be greatly strengthened by a controlling idea beginning with "because..." The rest of your post does not really address the assignment, nor are your paragraphs very well-structured. You seem to write down ideas as they come to your mind. I cannot find any answer to the critical thinking question: Is poverty necessary?
I recommend spending more time drafting your response before posting it. Observe the rules of paragraph structure we looked at in class.
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