Sunday, November 4, 2007

is poverty necessary ?

In my opinion we need poverty in our world because if there weren't poverty there wouldn't be affluence either . Poor people need rich people to earn money also riches need poor people to earn more money. I think this is how it works in business life.
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3 comments:

ece sonmez said...

the topic sentence='if there weren't poverty there wouldn't be affluence either'
this topic sentence is complete and have a concluding idea but it could be more pertinent with the paragraph.

November 9, 2007 at 2:25 AM
Ugur Can said...

Topic sentence is "In my opinion we need poverty in our world because if there weren't poverty there wouldn't be affluence either". There is one supporting idea"Poor people need rich people to earn money also riches need poor people to earn more money". Also concluding sentence was given "I think this is how it works in business life". It's not detailed but it's alright with the rules of writing academic essay.

November 11, 2007 at 2:02 PM
Erdi Talimlier said...

topic sent: if there weren't poverty there wouldn't be affluence either

there is no strong supporting idea. but it does not mean that it's a bad paragraph.

November 11, 2007 at 10:09 PM

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