Tuesday, November 6, 2007

Is Poverty Necessary

In this globalised world, we are all face to poverty and social inequality that are the concequences of capitalism and desire of holding the political power and having economic dominance. Even, we sometimes suffer from poverty in society while we are keeping going to live and survive, such as robbery, severity, illegality and ignorantness. Therefore all social institutions are organized to meet for one common point that is to hamper poverty and provide social equality within society in order to access citizenship and the exixtance of democrasy in social means.

However, even though we all suffer from poverty and try our bests for diminishing the huge gap or difference between the social classes or aiming to afford quite similar economic income and social life standard within individuals in society as a social duty, we are all aware of the impossibility of rebelling against poverty as we consider that we are living in a kind of world where all points are made or created with the traces of capitalism. If we examine the system of capitalism, we can determine that in capitalism there is no concept of social inequality. As Marshall refers, according to capitalist approach we need to have poverty, social inequality and diversity in economic means in order to have elite class and wealtier people living with poor ones. Moreover, we can conclude that there should be under-developed countries in order to see some developed ones. For instance, in this globalized world, developed countries provide their opulence by exploiting the developing countries. If there was no poor state to exploit and take advantage on, then there would be no rich countries, because they ensure their economic dominace by controlling poor ones. At this point we can suppose that poverty is necessary in order to create wealtier countries. The other example can be given in business life, the shareholders or businessmen can not make profit and increase their revenue without labors. Therefore, the bussinessmen get richer and richer with the labor power of the poor class.

Finally, throughout these examples and Marshall's statements, I agree with the idea which illustrates that poverty is necessary. Actually, I am aware of that social inequality and poverty are not the suitable positions for accessing citizenship, human rights and social healty in society. However, by considering the type of system that assits the world turning around I understan that we can not hamper the poverty that helps the wealtier people get more rich but maybe only diminish the gap between the social classes by tring our bests as a social duty.

2 comments:

Merveeraydin said...

In my writing about if poverty is necessary or not, at first I tried to compose a hook paragraph. I mean that I tried to enter the issue with a interesting overall view. Therefore my topic sentence is not my first paragraph but the second one. The topic sentence is "Aas Marshall refers, according to capitalist approach we need to have poverty, social inequality and diversity in economic means in order to have elite class and wealtier people living with poor ones. I think that according to the rules that one topic sentence should have, mine is fine by being a complete sentence, containing subject, verb and controlling ideas. Moreover it is not too general and not too specific and it includes the main idea of if poverty is necessary and if it is why. Thus,it does not have too many specific details. However one mistake that I have done while writing it that I created my topic sentence after two sentences in the second paragraph. However, I know that I should include my topic sentence in the first paragraph after I made an interesting hook or introduction (at the end of the first paragraph). Therefore, next time the one vital thing that I would be careful about to place my topic sentence at the good position and so that the readers can easily realize the main idea of my essay.

Sonja Tack said...

You obviously have a lot to say and are used to writing longer pieces, but for the purposes of the class blog, please limit your answer to a paragraph or so. This will force you to make crucial editing decisions and to only include absolutely relevant information. Essays are not necessary on the blog.

I think your first paragraph is unnecessary to answer the assignment question. I would rather see your response get directly to the point.

Your second paragraph gives some quite well-developed examples, but one sentence contains an obvious contradiction: "If we examine the system of capitalism, we can determine that in capitalism there is no concept of social inequality." Furthermore, I would cut out at least the first 9 lines to tighten your argument.

Your concluding sentence shows a realistic awareness of the future of inequality and avoids polemic or generalisation.

There are some mistakes: e.g "ignorantness" in Paragraph 1 should be "ignorance."