Sunday, December 2, 2007

Can Turks be trusted with their own future?

Turks can't be trusted with their future if the ruling elite continues not to trust them.The lack of confidence should be prevented in some way.And this can all be done by trusting the present day.Turkey isn't in need of a ruling elite that doesn't have a faith in even it's citizens and can't see the flames in their eyes that is burning with the love of their country.Just like Kinzer stated, the elite's manner causes Turkey to be in a "national dilemma" that blocks the country to develop.That's why it became a country that has come to a stand still although it has the potential to be one of the advanced domains in the world.The elite disdains Turkey's desicions so much that it automatically affects Turks belief in themselves.But this shouldn't be like that.Turkey has passed through so many difficulties, saved itself from a dark age and came to today's democratic position years ago.So to conclude, Turkey's future is in Turk's hands.There should be a more authentic atmosphere in order to feel the democracy better.I believe that the Turk's trust with their own future is not possible until the ruling elite does an effective interference about Turkey's future.

1 comment:

Sonja Tack said...

Thanks for following the posting instructions precisely.

A few points:
1. Your topic sentence isn't completely clear. You have to give a clear reason as to why Turkish people should be trusted.

2. You use some exaggerated, literary style language that does not belong in academic writing:
"see the flames in their eyes that is burning with the love of their country"; "saved itself from a dark age". This weakens your writing and makes a negative impression on your reader.

3. Your overall argument is vague. You say things like "it has potential", "it has passed through so many difficulties" and "authentic atmosphere", but the reader has no idea what you are talking about. Give concrete examples to persuade the reader to agree with you. Your last sentence contradicts itself, so you may want to check the grammar.