I think,Turks can be trusted with their own future.If we compare the past and now for Turkey,we can see the lots of things had changed.Now,Turkey is divided up some parts within itself.Such as;elite.. At the present day some of people stil think that elite should continue to make all important decisions.But the most important issue is why elite? All people have equal rights,they are capable of make right decisions. On the other hand,we have to ask this question too;did elite govern with democracy? If not;how they would make right decisions? Elite defend democracy in Turkey.While the last elections,people didn’t provide them healthy competition with other nations.They wanted to increase their quality,but hey didn’t.Because of the political policy.It has changed many people’s life. Priotor to my departure,all nations were acquaintanced Turks with Atatürk.He was the leader of us;his aim was destroying the differences between peoples’ and supplying more democratic conditions for us. According to the Kinzer's text,if Turks supply more democratic conditions,secularism would be done,so Turkey will more close for its dreams.The new Turkish republic was established by Atatürk in the hostile climate.We have to consider to make this nation standing on a prosperous and free land. Consequently;if we want to modern Turkey,we have to abrogate the social inequalities between people.It will help to compose us to increase the powerity of our nation.
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I added the label to this post and fixed the font to make it easier to read.
A few comments:
1. One thing that makes this post difficult to read is the misuse of punctuation. a) You shouldn't put a comma (,) after "I think" or "now". b) Look at this sentence: "Such as; elite.." You also use a semicolon here: "If not; how..." You should use a comma after "consequently".
Some very difficult to read sentences:
"Priotor to my departure,all nations were acquaintanced Turks with Atatürk." ??
"It will help to compose us to increase the powerity of our nation."
"On the other hand,we have to ask this question too;did elite govern with democracy? If not;how they would make right decisions?"
More time spent drafting and editing should help you to improve this.
2. In your topic sentence you say that "lots of things have changed." Like what? This needs to be more specific.
3. I think in general it would be beneficial for you to cut down on the length of your paragraph to make your arguments clearer.
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