Sunday, December 2, 2007
Can Turks be trusted with their own future?
Turks can make decisions for their future not completely but partly, because democracy has occurred in Turkey with not evolution but with revolution. In other words, Turks fell in many difficulties with the sudden change of system of government in the past. In other countries in which democracy occurred with evolution, people who live there gradually got used to live democratically. Our country efficaciously adopts democracy, but indeed people like being managed. Turks are people who lived in a country in which absolute monarchy existed and so in Turkey, there are still many people who sympathize to that patriarchal government system. In Kinzer’s text, he states that In Turkey it is not hard to find thoughtful, worldly people who believe their country is not ready for full democracy. Turkey is said to be a democratic country; but it is not for full. For example, getting in the university wearing turban is forbidden for girls; but a boy who shares the same ideas with that girl can get in that university. In this case, the girl has to make a decision between getting education or wearing turban and this is not democratic. By the way, I do not defend that wearing turban in university is right; it is a different issue. Consequently, Turks need more time to have a full democratic system and if secularism and culture of democracy exist accurately, then Turks can be trusted for their future.
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Thanks for following the posting instructions precisely.
What a great topic sentence! It really draws the reader in, especially by using the inverted grammatical structure and the rhyming words.
You make an interesting and original argument.
Some suggestions:
1. You must use quotation marks "" when lifting from Kinzer's text; here you have plagiarised him.
2. "turban" is Turkish; it is "headscarf" in English. And you're right, although Turkey professes to be a democratic country, there is not much religious freedom, which means many Turkish women are put in the difficult position of choosing between their religious beliefs and their country.
3. You should avoid using "by the way" in academic writing as it weakens your organisation.
4. Can you expand on your idea of "Turks need more time"? How will time help them?
5. By the way, democracy did not occur by evolution in the USA, but also by revolution...can you make any comparisons or contrasts?
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