Sunday, December 2, 2007
Can Turks be trusted with their own future?
I think Turks can be trusted with their own future. However, it is really needed a complete change. Turkish Military Institution is the most trusted institution in Turkey. Turks feel a sincere respect, administration and even affection for a man in uniform. Military is one of the fundamental institutions in Turkey. People can’t get rid off the idea that military can solve whatever it happens. Because of this, government loses its power. Military influences over politics and think that they know what is best for Turkey. Turkish people need an authority for telling them what they have to do. It comes from Atatürk’s one-man revolution. Atatürk changed this country’s fate. But all these developments made by him. That’s why people don’t have self-confidence. They don’t think that they aren’t mature enough to decide their own destiny.
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You should have highlighted your concluding sentence...why did you highlight one in the middle of the paragraph?
Some suggestions:
1. Your argument is a little confusing. You say Turks can be trusted, then you go on to describe the ways in which they CANNOT be trusted. What is your position?
2. Your topic sentence needs a controlling idea: "Turks can be trusted with their own future because..." This will give the reader an idea of what is to come.
3. Your paragraph seems incomplete. I start to lose the logic after you mention Atatürk. Your last sentence contains two negative verbs, so it doesn't make sense. And where is development of the "complete change" you mentioned? This point seems to have been abandoned at the end.
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