Monday, December 3, 2007

Can Turks Be Trusted With Their Own Future?

Turkey encounters lots of problems in the world that is being managed by money. It was really an uneducated country before. But now, it is in countries which is developing. This point is very important about Turkey, because this shows that it is sufficient at all points. Uneducated side of Turkey is reducing. People can realize any thing about Turkey’s life more quickly. The government has been different, of course, until Ataturk’s time. The authority of public did not effect enough to management. But Turks have always decided themselves about their future, also Ataturk’s contribution was very important about this point. But Turks have always power which ensures to be independent. Directors and countries which scare from Turkey’s evolution has effected and still effect adversely to Turkey. But this does not show that the ruler elite can decide instead of Turks. Turkey that improves day to day and considers more important, adopts democracy. And Turkey has moved with democracy, now still does it. Some ideas and conclusions in Kinzer text are even true, Turks are exactly mature at all points. While ignorance in Turkey is reducing by time, Turks will be more mature and conscious, so they will bear their nation on the top. Hence the ruling elite should not make all important decisions. Turks can be trusted with their own future.

1 comment:

Sonja Tack said...

Thanks for following the posting instructions precisely.

A few comments:
1. Your topic sentence doesn't directly answer the assignment question; you should make it more explicit. I'm not sure what your main argument is. Is it about education or awareness of democracy or something else? Your points seem a little mixed together.

2. Some of your examples are vague and need to be more concrete. For example: "People can realize any thing about Turkey’s life more quickly." What do you mean by anything?

3. You cannot assume that the reader knows the Kinzer text. You're writing for a general audience, so you have to summarise Kinzer's ideas and conclusions.